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What special features do you think should be added to computers?

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Truly, I don't what special features should be added to computer. It's because I'm a computer illiterate. But if I can do it, I could add the artificial intelligence like Jarvis. It's from Iron man. :)

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Hi Hyeon:) 

Yes, that's a great idea. I hope that computers would be like Jarvis someday. That would be so cool! hahahah!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

Truly, I don't what special features should be added to computer. 
>> Truly, I don't want to add any special features to computers. 

It's because I'm a computer illiterate. 
>> It is because I am computer literate. 

But if I can do it, I could add the artificial intelligence like Jarvis. It's from Iron man. :)
>> But if I had the chance, I would like to add artificial intelligence like Jarvis from the movie Iron Man. 
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