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What do you think of renting clothes and toys?

작성자: 김*경
2022-01-19 703

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I see many shops renting toys and clothes nowadays. I also see many public facilities lending toys for nothing for some period.
Renting clothes and toys benefit both customers and shop owners. For customer, they can use as many toys as they want at a reasonable price. There are also lots of expensive toys to rent. For shop owners, they can make a profit from their stock by renting them out.

As the sharing economy is getting more and more popular, making money by renting goods out is going to become common among businesses. Sharing goods is also good for our environment. No more virtue to produce and dump goods for capitalism because It is time to think about our environment for our generation and next generation to come.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Steve! You were able to use good expressions in your work. Awesome!


- Debbie

I see many shops renting toys and clothes nowadays. 
>> This is a good sentence.

I also see many public facilities lending toys for nothing for some period.
>> I also see many public facilities lending toys for free for some period.

Renting clothes and toys benefit both customers and shop owners.
>> Renting clothes and toys benefits both customers and shop owners.

For customer, they can use as many toys as they want at a reasonable price. 
>> Customers can use as many toys as they want at a reasonable price. 

There are also lots of expensive toys to rent.
>> This is a good sentence.

 For shop owners, they can make a profit from their stock by renting them out.
>> Shop owners can make a profit from their stocks by renting them out.

As the sharing economy is getting more and more popular, making money by renting goods out is going to become common among businesses.
>> This is a good sentence.

Sharing goods is also good for our environment. 
>> This is a good sentence.

No more virtue to produce and dump goods for capitalism because It is time to think about our environment for our generation and next generation to come.
>> We should no longer produce goods that we'll just dump because it is time to think about our environment for our generation and the next generation to come.

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