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There are two ways for relaxing

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There are two ways to relax. In fact, the ways are different to each person. In my case, the first is listening 'Blind Film' and close eyes on the bed, and the second is stretching and meditation. In some view points, they are same. But in my case, taking nap with Blind Film is the best. Frankly meditation and taking a nap are similar. But the effect of taking a nap is better. Because it's the best way to make my brain rest. According to scientists, proper taking a nap is very good for our health because we can't think anything in that time. Thinking makes our brains tiring. But it have to be short. If we take a nap lots of times, then we can't sleep enough in night times. And we shouldn't sleep after breakfast. It can be a very bad habit, so taking a nap after lunch. After lunch is the most tiring time to our brains. In this time, taking nap is very good for our brains. In addition, listening Blind Film has some power that make us sleep, so I recommend this music.

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Hello, Daniel! Thank you for doing your homework and for recommending Blind Film. I'm actually listening to it right now, and it sounds heavenly. I like it!

Please take note of the corrections. 

- Teacher Debbie

There are two ways to relax. 
>> There are different ways to relax.

In fact, the ways are different to each person.
>> They vary for each person.

In my case, the first is listening 'Blind Film' and close eyes on the bed, and the second is stretching and meditation.
>> In my case, the first thing I do is listen to "Blind Film"  while lying on the bed with my eyes closed. The second thing I do is stretch and meditate. 

In some view points, they are same. 
>> From some people's viewpoints, they are the same.

But in my case, taking nap with Blind Film is the best. 
>> However, in my case, taking a nap while listening to Blind Film is better.

Frankly meditation and taking a nap are similar. But the effect of taking a nap is better.
>> Meditation and taking a nap are similar, but the effect of taking a nap is better than the effect of meditation.

Because it's the best way to make my brain rest.
>> It's rests my brain.

According to scientists, proper taking a nap is very good for our health because we can't think anything in that time. 
>>  According to scientists, taking a nap is very good for our health because we don't think about anything during that time.

Thinking makes our brains tiring. 
>> Thinking makes our brains tired.

But it have to be short. 
>> However, naps should be short.

If we take a nap lots of times, then we can't sleep enough in night times. 
>> If we take longer naps, we can't fall asleep easily at night.

And we shouldn't sleep after breakfast. 
>> We should not also sleep after breakfast.

It can be a very bad habit, so taking a nap after lunch. 
>> It can be a very bad habit, so we should take naps after lunch.

After lunch is the most tiring time to our brains.
>> After lunch, our brains tend to become tired.

 In this time, taking nap is very good for our brains.
>> Therefore, taking a nap at this time is perfect for our brains.

In addition, listening  Blind Film has some power that make us sleep, so I recommend this music.
>> In addition, listening to Blind Film has some power that makes us sleep, so I recommend this music.
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