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What do you think is your main purpose in life?

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I think there is no any purpose in our lives.
There is no any due that we must do in our lives.
But, we make the purpose about our lives.
And we are thinking that the purpose is our main purpose of our lives.
The purpose changes by our lives, so there is no any main purpose in our lives.
We are just making it, and living according to it.

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Hi John :) 

At some point, you are right. We are not given any purpose when we first existed in this world. We are the ones in control of our faith. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think there is no any purpose in our lives.
>> CORRECT

There is no any due that we must do in our lives.
>> There are no duties that we must do in our lives. 

But, we make the purpose about our lives.
>> But we are the ones that makes it. 

And we are thinking that the purpose is our main purpose of our lives.
>> We usually think about this. 

The purpose changes by our lives, so there is no any main purpose in our lives.
>> These purposes changes throughout our lives there isn't any main purpose. 

We are just making it, and living according to it. 
>>  CORRECT
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