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Have you ever felt discrimination from other people before? How should we deal with it?

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No, I haven't. I have rarely felt discrimination in person but I know we have to do our best to stop discriminating. To stop discriminating, we should think about the opponents' feeling. It is not easy but if we don't do this, clearly, the opponents may get hurt. People who there are around me, are special and valuable. We don't have the right which make them sad. If we do our best, the next generation will be able to live in the better society. I also want to live in the society.

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Hi Kimberly:) 

At some point in our lives, we can feel discrimination from other people but there is always a good way to properly handle it. These things should not affect us in a negative way but let it be something positive that can motivate us to become better people. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

No, I haven't. 
>> CORRECT

I have rarely felt discrimination in person but I know we have to do our best to stop discriminating. 
>> I have rarely felt discrimination in person but I know we have to do our best to stop it. 

To stop discriminating, we should think about the opponents' feeling. 
>> To stop discrimination, we should think about the other person's feeling. 

It is not easy but if we don't do this, clearly, the opponents may get hurt. 
>> It is not easy but if we don't do this, the other person might get hurt. 

People who there are around me, are special and valuable. 
>> The people around me are special and valuable. 

We don't have the right which make them sad. 
>> We don't have the right to make them sad. 

If we do our best, the next generation will be able to live in the better society. 
>> If we do our best, the next generation will be able to live in a better society. 

also want to live in the society.
>> I also want to live in that kind of society. 
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