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Kindly answer the following in essay form.
Have you ever felt discrimination from other people before? How should we deal with it?

I don't have ever felt discrimination. But I sometimes look discrimination on the media. There are many type of discrimination like gender, regional, racial etc. I think there is no reason to discriminate against individual characteristics. So we don't have to have a negative look at other people's characteristics. We must admit that each person is different.

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Hi Won:) 

At some point in our lives, we can feel discrimination from other people but there is always a good way to properly handle it. These things should not affect us in a negative way but let it be something positive that can motivate us to become better people. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I don't have ever felt discrimination. 
>> I have never felt discrimination before but sometimes I see it through media. 

But I sometimes look discrimination on the media. 
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

There are many type of discrimination like gender, regional, racial etc. 
>> There are many types of discrimination according to like gender, religion, race and many more. 

I think there is no reason to discriminate against individual characteristics. 
>> I think there is no reason to discriminate an individual's characteristics. 

So we don't have to have a negative look at other people's characteristics.
>> So we don't need to look down on them. 

 We must admit that each person is different. 
>> We must understand that each person is different and we have to accept that. 
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