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I have never felt discrimination yet,but I think I will feel discrimination when I go to abroad like eroupe. I think it will be very tired and sad to suffer discrimination.

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Hi Alex:) 

At some point in our lives, we can feel discrimination from other people but there is always a good way to properly handle it. These things should not affect us in a negative way but let it be something positive that can motivate us to become better people. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I have never felt discrimination yet,but I think I will feel discrimination when I go to abroad like eroupe. 
>>I have never felt discrimination yet ,but I think I will feel it when I go to places like Europe. 

I think it will be very tired and sad to suffer discrimination.
>> I think it will be very tiring and sad to suffer from discrimination.
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