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In the past, elephants that were lived in the zoo escaped from the zoo. The zoo was located in Seoul. Think that elephants wander in the city and get into small restaurant. I think it will be terrible. However, It happened in Seoul where is the capital of Korea. There was a big commotion in the city. Lots of people tried to make elephants get out from the restaurant. Fortunately, there was not any injured person, but the restaurant was destroyed. Like it, there will be very big commotion in the city if elephants escape from the zoo and get out to city.

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Hello, Daniel!  You have answered the question appropriately. However, you have to be careful with sentence construction. Please organize your sentences more. You can do it!

- Teacher Debbie


Think that elephants wander in the city and get into small restaurant. I think it will be terrible. 
>> I think elephants wandering in a city and going into a small restaurant is terrible. 

In the past, elephants that were lived in the zoo escaped from the zoo.
>> However, it happened in the past. Elephants that lived in a zoo escaped. 

The zoo was located in Seoul. It happened in Seoul where is the capital of Korea.
>>  The zoo was located in Seoul-the capital of Korea.

There was a big commotion in the city. 
>> This is a good sentence.

Lots of people tried to make elephants get out from the restaurant. 
>> Lots of people tried to make the elephants get out of a restaurant. 

Fortunately, there was not any injured person, but the restaurant was destroyed. 
>> Fortunately, nobody got injured. However, the restaurant got destroyed.

Like it, there will be very big commotion in the city if elephants escape from the zoo and get out to city.
>> Just like what happened in Seoul, there will be a very big commotion in a city if elephants escape from a zoo.
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