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Kindly answer the following in essay form.
Do you think that older people are always right? Why or why not?

I don't think they are always right. They have a wealth of experience about how to live well. But I think some experiences are not right. Because the world is changing so fast, some of them are useless. Some older people have stereotype. So they think they are always right, they sometimes press young people to think their way. So they have to think that their thinking can be wrong, recognize the world is changing.

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Hi Won:)

That's true. Every person makes mistakes. Humans are not perfect regardless is you are  older or younger so we have to respect each other equally. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I don't think they are always right. 
>> CORRECT

They have a wealth of experience about how to live well. 
>> They have  the wealth for experience about how to live well but I think not all of them are right. 

But I think some experiences are not right. 
>> CONNNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

Because the world is changing so fast, some of them are useless. 
>> It is because the world is changing so fast so some things will be useless. 

Some older people have stereotype. 
>> Some older people have stereotypes. 

So they think they are always right, they sometimes press young people to think their way. 
>> This is why they always think that they are right. They sometime press younger people to think the same way they do. 

So they have to think that their thinking can be wrong, recognize the world is changing.
>> So they have to realize that sometimes they are wrong and recognize that the world is constantly changing. 
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