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Do you think that older people are always right? Why or why not?

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I don't think about that. It's because the times of living with them have changed. But we can't ignore their experiences in their life.

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Hi Hyeon:)

That's true. Every person makes mistakes. Humans are not perfect regardless is you are  older or younger so we have to respect each other equally. Although, at some point, they have their own perspective in life because of their experiences so we shouldn't disregard that. 

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I don't think about that. 
>> I don't think so. 

It's because the times of living with them have changed. 
>> It is because time has changed. 

But we can't ignore their experiences in their life.
>> Although, we can't ignore their experiences in life. 
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