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She moved to CHeongun-dong(distric name) to focus on her inner-self and a little quite comfort in gangnam-gu(district name), where people are busy.
She currently lives with her dog i a 231 sqm house with warm sunshine and green namsan mountain.
Although She likes wood materials and vintage interiors, the new house is already full of natural elements, so she applued modern materials.
She used a large table and sofa in consideration of the guests coming to her house in the past, but this time, she chose a table that can seat 4 people in order to enjoy the meal intimately.

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Hi, Zihyun!
Thank you for writing this beautiful essay. 
I think your new home looks beautiful. The view from your home must be really relaxing. 
I want to live in peaceful place someday too. I'm glad that you're happy. 
See you again in class later. ^_^
~Charry

She moved to CHeongun-dong(distric name) to focus on her inner-self and a little quite comfort in gangnam-gu(district name), where people are busy.
>> She moved to the district of Cheongun-dong to focus on her inner-self and have a little peace and comfort from the district of Gangnam where people are busy.
She currently lives with her dog i a 231 sqm house with warm sunshine and green namsan mountain.
>> She currently lives with her dog in a 231 sqm. house with warm sunshine near the green Namsan Mountain.
Although She likes wood materials and vintage interiors, the new house is already full of natural elements, so she applued modern materials.
>> Although she likes wood materials and vintage interiors, the new house is already full of natural elements, so she applauds the modern materials in it.
She used a large table and sofa in consideration of the guests coming to her house in the past, but this time, she chose a table that can seat 4 people in order to enjoy the meal intimately.
>> She used to have a large table and sofa in consideration of the guests coming to her house but this time, she chose a table that can accommodate only 4 people in order to enjoy an intimate meal. 
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