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Who is the teacher that inspired you the most when you were younger and why?

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The teacher that inspired me the most is a homeroom teacher when I was 3rd grade because she was strict and scary. So, I couldn't enjoy my school life but I realized that she loves us. She was strict and scary but thanks to her strict and scary behaviors and sentences, I could grow up and be a better person. Her behaviors were for us. After I realize about her love, I'm very thankful to her. If I can meet her again, I want to meet her again.

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Hi Kimberly:)

Teachers who help us grow as people are responsible for imparting some of life's most important lessonsThough a teacher's influence on the social sphere of school lessens as students mature, those early lessons still have an effect on how they will interact with others in the future.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

The teacher that inspired me the most is a homeroom teacher when I was 3rd grade because she was strict and scary. 
>> The teacher that inspired me the most is my homeroom teacher when I was in 3rd grade because she was strict and scary. 

So, I couldn't enjoy my school life but I realized that she loves us. 
>> I couldn't enjoy my school life back then but I just realized the she loved us. 

She was strict and scary but thanks to her strict and scary behaviors and sentences, I could grow up and be a better person. 
>> She may be strict and  scary but thanks to that,  I grew up to be a better person. 

Her behaviors were for us.
>> her behavior was for our benefit. 

 After I realize about her love, I'm very thankful to her. 
>> After I realized that, I feel thankful for her. 

If I can meet her again, I want to meet her again.
>> I wish I can meet her again. 
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