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Old People and Young People

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I disagree that old people are always right. It is not true that living longer gives intelligent to us. Sometimes, old people are more wise than young people because they experienced many things,but it cannot be applied to all of old people. Some old people can be more silly than young people even though they are oleder,because young people can have more specific knowledge than them.

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Hi Alex:)

That's true. Every person makes mistakes. Humans are not perfect regardless is you are  older or younger so we have to respect each other equally. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I disagree that old people are always right. 
>> CORRECT

It is not true that living longer gives intelligent to us. 
>> It is not true that living longer gives us more knowledge. 

Sometimes, old people are more wise than young people because they experienced many things,but it cannot be applied to all of old people. 
>> Sometimes old people are wiser than young people because they have a lot of experiences but this can't be applied to all of them. 

Some old people can be more silly than young people even though they are oleder,because young people can have more specific knowledge than them
>> Some old people are sillier than young people because some of the younger generation have more specific knowledges than them. 
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