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Who is the teacher that inspired you the most when you were younger and why?

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Who is the teacher that inspired you the most when you were younger and why?

I don't have the teacher who inspired me.
But there were some good teachers.
He gave me more free spirited to study to go to the university.
He didn't want us to be stressed due to study.

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Hi Monica. :)

Your teacher sounds very nice and considerate. He knows the struggles of being a student very well. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I don't have the teacher who inspired me.
>> I don't have a teacher that inspired me but I had some good teachers before. 

But there were some good teachers.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

He gave me more free spirited to study to go to the university.
>> That teacher gave me a more free spirited personality to study and go to a university. 

He didn't want us to be stressed due to study.
>> He didn't want us to be stressed due to studying. 

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