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Worst and best president

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It is my personal opinion, best president in Korea is Kim Dea Joong.
He's the winner of the nobel peace prize.
While he was working as president of Korea, he solved diplomatic issues without major incidents.
And worst president is Park Gyeun Hye.
She is first woman president of Korea.
But she ruined everything.
She is the daughter of former President Park Jung Hee.
And every Korean we have believe she does better than other contestant.
But she is doll of Choi Soon Shill. She is worst person in Korea.

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Hi Ann:)

Wow. I didn't know those information about the government of South Korea. It's very interesting. Thanks for sharing. :) 

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It is my personal opinion, best president in Korea is Kim Dea Joong.
>> Based on my personal opinion, the Kim Dae Joong is the best president of South Korea. 

He's the winner of the nobel peace prize.
>> He won a Nobel Prize before. 

While he was working as president of Korea, he solved diplomatic issues without major incidents.
>>While he was working as the president of South Korea, he solved diplomatic issues without major incidents.

And worst president is Park Gyeun Hye.
>> CORRECT

She is first woman president of Korea.
>> She is first woman president of South Korea but she ruined everything during her term. 

But she ruined everything.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

She is the daughter of former President Park Jung Hee.
>> CORRECT

And every Korean we have believe she does better than other contestant.
>> And every Korean believed she will do better than other contestants.

But she is doll of Choi Soon Shill. 
>> But she was just like a puppet of Choi Soon Shill. 

She is worst person in Korea.
>>She is the worst person in South Korea.

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