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Kindly answer the following in essay form.
What is your favorite tradition in South Korea? Explain your answer.

My favorite tradition is New Year's cash gifts. It is that if I perform the new year's bow to elder, they give me some money and advice.
In this process, We wish that this year will be happy to each other. Also I can express respect to them. And this is an opportunity I can
receive a lot of money. So after seollal, I always buy something I want to buy.

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Hi John:)

Yes, I think this tradition is very common in Asian countries. We also have something very similar. hehehe!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

My favorite tradition is New Year's cash gifts. 
>> My favorite tradition is giving cash to children during Seollal. 
 
It is that if I perform the new year's bow to elder, they give me some money and advice.
>> Children usually bow to the elderly people and the receive money and advice afterwards. 

In this process, We wish that this year will be happy to each other. 
>> In this process, we wish that this year will be filled with happiness. 

Also I can express respect to them.
>> Also, ii can show my respect towards them. 
 
And this is an opportunity I canreceive a lot of money. 
>> I can also receive a lot of money through this. 

So after seollal, I always buy something I want to buy.
>> So after Seollal, I always buy the things that I want. 
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