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Bill Watterson said: "Weekends don't count unless you spend them doing something completely pointless." Do you agree?

I agree that idea. I think people should do nothing or do something not very stessful when they are in rest. Because going out and having fun can also make person tired. And If someone spend his whole power on weekends, he will have no power to work on weekdays.

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Hello there Jane! I applaud your diligence in doing your task. Keep writing your thoughts :) Take care!
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I agree that idea. 
>>> I agree with that idea. 
I think people should do nothing or do something not very stessful when they are in rest. 
>>>  I think people should do nothing or  not do something stressful when they are at rest. 
Because going out and having fun can also make person tired.
>>>  Because going out and having fun can also make a person tired.
And If someone spend his whole power on weekends, he will have no power to work on weekdays.
>>>   And If someone spends his whole energy on weekends, he will have no power to work on weekdays.
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