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Why kids should follow the school rules.

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I think kids should follow the school rules.
That is because school rules are very important.
My second reason is when we don't follow the school rules, we can have some hurt.
My third reason is the all-school rules are very easy to follow.
Finally, when we don't follow the school rules, the teacher will punish kids.

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Hi, Joey! Thank you so much for doing your homework. You were able to make good sentences.   Keep on writing to improve your skills more. 

- Teacher Debbie


I think kids should follow the school rules.
>> This is a good sentence.

That is because school rules are very important.
>> This is a good sentence.


My third reason is the all-school rules are very easy to follow. 
>> Moreover, they are very easy to follow.

My second reason is when we don't follow the school rules, we can have some hurt.
>> When we don't follow them, we can be hurt.

Finally, when we don't follow the school rules, the teacher will punish kids.
>>  When we don't follow them, our teachers will punish us. 
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