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Kids should play chess with their friends

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In my opinion, kids should play chess with their friends. Chess has lots of advantages. First, people who play chess can improve their IQ. In chess, players have to think a lot about how to catch the king. Throughout this thinking, the IQ increases. Second, in this game, if kids play it with their friends, then the friendship can increase. It can make kids know how to understand losing and victory.

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In my opinion, kids should play chess with their friends.
>> This is a good sentence.

Chess has lots of advantages.
>>Playing chess has lots of advantages.

First, people who play chess can improve their IQ. 
>> First, people who play chess can improve their IQs. 

In chess, players have to think a lot about how to catch the king. 
>> This is a good sentence.

Throughout this thinking, the IQ increases.
>> Through thinking, the IQ increases.

Second, in this game, if kids play it with their friends, then the friendship can increase. 
>> Second, if kids play this game with their friends, their friendship can be stronger. 

It can make kids know how to understand losing and victory.
>> It can also make kids understand losing and winning.
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