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Why I don\'t want to live in another country.

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I don't want to live in another country.
That is because my city is very good than another country.
My second reason is I'm already adapted to this country.
My third reason is other country living is hard.
Finally, my grandmother is have moved to this country.

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Hi, Joey! Thank you for doing your homework. You made a good sentence and used a difficult word in one of your sentences. Amazing! However, you  have to work more on sentence construction. 


- Teacher Debbie

I don't want to live in another country.
>> This is a good sentence.

That is because my city is very good than another country.
>> That is because my country is better than another country.

My second reason is I'm already adapted to this country. 
My third reason is other country living is hard. Finally, my grandmother is have moved to this country.
>> Living in another country is hard. I'm already adapted to mine. Moreover, my grandmother moved to this country.


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