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Writing Task (Feb 9th, 2022)

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What do you think is the best job? What do you think is the worst?
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It might be not realistic, but the best job is to make huge bucks doing what I love to do. I haven¡¯t found it yet, but I¡¯m still trying to find it. I don¡¯t think I love my job. Truth be told, I don¡¯t even like it. I naively chose this job, working as a civil servant in a local government, only because it is very stable. We never get fired unless we make serious problems, like embezzling the budget, injuring people severely, etc. However, that¡¯s it. That is all I¡¯m content with the job I have. But, now, I have a quite different perspective, which is, that I can quit and change the job at any time only if I have fully ready to make a living doing other things. I¡¯m gaining self-confidence and s strong belief in my ability!!!

And the worst job is doing what I¡¯m about to do today, whether I like or not. That means the man does not live his life.

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Hello, U Seung!

I understand your point there. I think the best job is really earning pretty well while enjoying the job at the same time. I know that life is pretty harsh sometimes, but I'm sure that all your hard work will be paid off in the future. I hope you'd be able to find a job or maybe have a business that you enjoy doing. 
Just keep believing that you can make it, BETTER DAYS ARE COMING! 

Thank you for sharing!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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It might be not realistic, but the best job is to make huge bucks doing what I love to do.
>>Correct! 
I haven¡¯t found it yet, but I¡¯m still trying to find it. I don¡¯t think I love my job. 
>>Correct! 
Truth be told, I don¡¯t even like it. 
>>Correct! 
I naively chose this job, working as a civil servant in a local government, only because it is very stable. 
>>I naively chose this job, working as a civil servant in a local government, only because it is a very stable. 
We never get fired unless we make serious problems, like embezzling the budget, injuring people severely, etc.
>>Correct! 
However, that¡¯s it. 
>>Correct! 
That is all I¡¯m content with the job I have. 
>>Correct! 
But, now, I have a quite different perspective, which is, that I can quit and change the job at any time only if I have fully ready to make a living doing other things. 
>>Correct! 
I¡¯m gaining self-confidence and s strong belief in my ability!!!
>>I¡¯m gaining self-confidence and a strong belief in my ability!!!
And the worst job is doing what I¡¯m about to do today, whether I like or not. That means the man does not live his life.
>>Correct! 
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