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How do you use body language when you communicate in English?

작성자: 김*경
2022-02-11 538

회원님의 영작문

I think I make a clumsy body language while talking. Frankly speaking, I was unconscious or indifferent about the importance of body language while talking until this class. But the more knowledge about it I have, the more I care about what is an effective body language. Some researchers say nonverbal communication accounts for the majority of information transmitted during interpersonal interpretations. Whether we're aware of it or not, Much information is conveyed through facial expressions, body posture, gestures, eye movement. In this respect, I feel sorry for the President's candidates who are not aware that their behaviors show their real feelings try to say differently from what's in mind. If something in mind shows outwardly somehow, we have to improve our mind and heart that we can't hide while talking, instead of practicing fancy speech skills. I am not saying that speech skills including body language are not necessay. It's a matter of what's more important.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Steve! Thank you for doing your homework. You managed to observe the proper verb tense in the entire essay.  However, you still have to be careful with sentence construction. 

- Debbie

I think I make a clumsy body language while talking. 
>> I think I make clumsy body language while talking.

Frankly speaking, I was unconscious or indifferent about the importance of body language while talking until this class. 
>> I was  unconscious or indifferent about the importance of body language while talking until this class. 

But the more knowledge about it I have, the more I care about what is an effective body language. 
>> The more knowledge I have about it, the more I care about body language.

Some researchers say nonverbal communication accounts for the majority of information transmitted during interpersonal interpretations. 
>> This is a good sentence.

Whether we're aware of it or not, Much information is conveyed through facial expressions, body posture, gestures, eye movement. 
>> Whether we're aware of it or not, much information is conveyed through facial expressions, body postures, gestures, eye movements. 

In this respect, I feel sorry for the President's candidates who are not aware that their behaviors show their real feelings try to say differently from what's in mind. 
>> In this respect, I feel sorry for the presidential candidates who are not aware that their behaviors show their real feelings. 

If something in mind shows outwardly somehow, we have to improve our mind and heart that we can't hide while talking, instead of practicing fancy speech skills. 
>> Instead of practicing fancy speeches, we have to sharpen our minds and soften our hearts because we can't hide what's inside them while talking.

I am not saying that speech skills including body language are not necessay. 
>>  I am not saying that speech skills, including body language, are unnecessary. 

It's a matter of what's more important.
>> This is a good sentence.
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