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Currently, my biggest goal is to enter the university in Vietnam. Because I want to study management and taxation. And I'm going to get a license about tax and managenment in English language to improve my career. After graduation, with these licenses and experience, I', going to apply for an internship in the company in US. I will learn many experiences from doing my internship. I think success is to open my own store. These processes make me run my store well.

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Hello, Min Seo! ^^
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See you in our next week! :)

~ Teacher Tricia


Currently, my biggest goal is to enter the university in Vietnam. 
>> Currently, my biggest goal is to enter a university in Vietnam. 

Because I want to study management and taxation. 
>> CORRECT!

And I'm going to get a license about tax and managenment in English language to improve my career. 
>> And I'm going to get a license in tax and management in the English language to improve my career. 

After graduation, with these licenses and experience, I', going to apply for an internship in the company in US. 
>> After graduation, with these licenses and experiences, I'm, going to apply for an internship in a company in the US. 

I will learn many experiences from doing my internship. 
>> I will learn a lot of experiences from doing my internship. 

I think success is to open my own store. 
>> CORRECT!

These processes make me run my store well.
>> These phases will make me run my store well.
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