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What is that one thing that you will not change about yourself and why?

I will not change my habit to steadily exercise. I have exercised 5,6 times a week from two years ago. So I could get in shape better. One of the most important goal of my life is getting in shape. So I will constantly work out at the gym.

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That's a good habit. You will become fit and healthy. Keep it up!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I will not change my habit to steadily exercise. 
>> I will not change my habit of steadily exercising.

I have exercised 5,6 times a week from two years ago. 
>> I have exercised 5-6 times a week since two years ago so I could get in better shape. 

So I could get in shape better. 
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

One of the most important goal of my life is getting in shape. 
>> CORRECT

So I will constantly work out at the gym.
>> So, I will constantly work out at the gym.
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