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HOMEWORK:
Kindly answer the following in essay form.
What is that one thing that you will not change about yourself and why?

Answer: It's my ¡®kindness¡¯ . Because I don't want make uncomfortable people.

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Hi Anne:)

Wow, that's so sweet of you! That true. You are a very kind person. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

It's my ¡®kindness¡¯ . Because I don't want make uncomfortable people.
>> The thing that I don't want to change about myself is my kindness because I don't want to make other people uncomfortable. 
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