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The one thing I will not change myself is my personality. Everyone has thier own personality, so it can be their characteristic and also it is very hard to change.

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Hi Alex:)

That's true. Our personalities gives us character. It is what differentiate us from others. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

The one thing I will not change myself is my personality. 
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Everyone has thier own personality, so it can be their characteristic and also it is very hard to change.
>> Everyone has their own personality, so it can be their characteristic. Also, it is very hard to change.

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