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Why do you think school clubs or organizations are important?

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It's because human being is social animal. So, as human being, we should meet many people and grow our sociality. Especially, If you are a student, you should better join to school club. It's important to join any organizations, but I think the best thing is school club. It's because you can meet people of the same age.

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Hello there, Cindy!
It is nice to know your idea about the question.  Keep on improving your English sentences and explanation about the topic.  Remember to use the articles in your sentences too.  ^^


~T. Maine

It's because human being is social animal. 
>>It's because a human being is a social animal. 
So, as human being, we should meet many people and grow our sociality. 
>>So as human beings, we should meet many people and grow with sociality. 
Especially, If you are a student, you should better join to school club. 
>>Especially if you are a student, you should better join to school clubs. 
It's important to join any organizations, but I think the best thing is school club. 
>>It's important to join any organization, but I think the best thing is a school club. 
It's because you can meet people of the same age.
>>Correct. 

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