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What is that one thing that you will not change about yourself and why?

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In my opinion, I will not change my thoughts about justice.
I saw a lot of people who did bad things only because of money.
Of course we can earn money, but we should act inside of justice.
But some people get out of justice and do something that they shouldn't do.
And I don't wanna be one of them.
So for me, the one thing that I won't change about myself is the thoughts about justice.

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Hi John:)

That's a good thing that even if you're still young, you know your stand in terms of justice. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

In my opinion, I will not change my thoughts about justice.
>> CORRECT

I saw a lot of people who did bad things only because of money.
>> CORRECT

Of course we can earn money, but we should act inside of justice.
>> Of course we can earn money, but we should act in the side of justice.

But some people get out of justice and do something that they shouldn't do.
>> But some people refuse to do so and they still do things that are illegal. 

And I don't wanna be one of them.
>> CORRECT

So for me, the one thing that I won't change about myself is the thoughts about justice.
>> So for me, the one thing that I won't change about myself  are my thoughts about justice.

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