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What are your dreams or goals in life? / What will you do to achieve that goals and dreams?

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My dream is to be a dermatologist. Because I'm interested in dermatology and taking care of skin. And also I want to become a person who is giving happiness, by helping them improve their skin. The goal in my life is to open my own dermatologist. To achieve my goal and dream I have to study hard enough, search lots of information about dermatologists, go on university and then get a medical license and possess specialists, and then earn the money keep it for launching my own dermatologist hospital.

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Hi Risa,
Setting goals helps trigger new behaviors, helps guide your focus, and helps you sustain that momentum in life. Goals also help align your focus and promote a sense of self-mastery. Setting goals not only motivates us but can also improve our mental health and our level of personal and professional success. Study hard to achieve your goals and dream in life.  ~ Teacher QUENNY..

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My dream is to be a dermatologist. Because I'm interested in dermatology and taking care of skin.
>> My dream is to be a dermatologist because I'm interested in dermatology and taking care of skin.
 And also I want to become a person who is giving happiness, by helping them improve their skin. 
>> And also I want to become a person who is giving happiness to other people by helping them improve their skin. 
The goal in my life is to open my own dermatologist. 
>> My greatest goal in life is to open my own Dermatology Clinic. 
To achieve my goal and dream I have to study hard enough, search lots of information about dermatologists, go on university and then get a medical license and possess specialists, and then earn the money keep it for launching my own dermatologist hospital.
>> To achieve my goal and dream I have to study hard, search for lots of information about dermatologists, go to university and then get a medical license and possess specialists, and then earn money and save it for the launching of my own Dermatology Clinic. 
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My dream is to be a dermatologist. Because I'm interested in dermatology and taking care of skin. And also I want to become a person who is giving happiness, by helping them improve their skin. The goal in my life is to open my own dermatologist. To achieve my goal and dream I have to study hard enough, search lots of information about dermatologists, go on university and then get a medical license and possess specialists, and then earn the money keep it for launching my own dermatologist hospital.
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