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Hello! i'm daniel
Today I will introduce my travels. Let's go!
January 31, 2022 This day was the beginning of the New Year holiday.
Our family visited Sokcho Resort. with grandmather.
We ate delicious food, had fun at the water park, and played fun games during dinner time.
The bed in the resort felt good when lying down.
My brother slept warmly at 12pm.
We woke up and it was February 1st, the beginning of a new month,
We went to a famous restaurant and had a delicious breakfast.
and came home
I think it's good to go on this trip with my grandmother.
Our family decided to go on a trip on the last day of February. When that time comes, I will tell you an interesting story through this novel. Thanks for listening to me! a happy day!

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Hello, Daniel! It's good to know that you had so much traveling with your family and grandma. Thanks for sharing! Keep safe and see you later! :)

~ Teacher Annie



Hello! i'm daniel
>>Hello! I'm Daniel.
Today I will introduce my travels.
>>Correct!
>>OR: Today I will you about my travels.
 Let's go!
>>Correct!
>>OR: Let's start!
January 31, 2022 This day was the beginning of the New Year holiday.
>>The 31st of January, 2022  was the beginning of the New Year holiday.
Our family visited Sokcho Resort. with grandmather.
>>Our family visited Sokcho Resort with grandmother.
We ate delicious food, had fun at the water park, and played fun games during dinner time.
>>Correct!
The bed in the resort felt good when lying down.
>>It was good to lie down on the resort's bed.
My brother slept warmly at 12pm.
>>Correct!
>> My brother went to bed at 12 pm warmly.
We woke up and it was February 1st, the beginning of a new month,
>> The next day, we woke up to find it was February 1st, the beginning of a new month.
We went to a famous restaurant and had a delicious breakfast.
>>Correct!
and came home
>>Then, we went home.
I think it's good to go on this trip with my grandmother.
>>Correct!
Our family decided to go on a trip on the last day of February.
>>Correct!
>>OR: Our family decided to go on a trip again on the last day of February.
 When that time comes, I will tell you an interesting story through this novel.
>> When that time comes, I will tell you an interesting story through this essay.
 Thanks for listening to me!
>> Thanks for reading my composition.
  a happy day!
>>Have a happy day ahead!
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