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What is that one thing that you will not change about yourself and why?

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One thing that I will not change about myself is eating only what I want and like. I don't eat mushrooms and oysters because I don't like texture of them. I know this eating habits are not good but correcting my bad eating habits is not easy. Maybe I will not be able to correct them. / Another thing that I will not change about myself is my taste. My taste is fresh and simple. So, when I choose something, I choose fresh and simple things.

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Hi Kimberly:)

I have the same eating habit and I know it's hard to change. But you know, little steps can go a long way. 

PS: Please indicate the specific taste. (Ex. Taste in music, Taste in Fashion, Taste in Movies. etc.)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

One thing that I will not change about myself is eating only what I want and like. 
>> The one thing that I will not change about myself is only eating what I want and like.

I don't eat mushrooms and oysters because I don't like texture of them. 
>> CORRECT

I know this eating habits are not good but correcting my bad eating habits is not easy. 
>> I know this eating habits is not good but it's not easy to correct it. 

Maybe I will not be able to correct them. / 
>> Maybe I will not be able to correct them at all. 

Another thing that I will not change about myself is my taste. 
>>Another thing that I will not change about myself is my taste in different things.  

My taste is fresh and simple. 
>> My taste in thing are simple and fresh. 

So, when I choose something, I choose fresh and simple things.
>>So when I choose something, I usually pick the ones that are simple and fresh. 
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