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Q. Do you like meeting new people?

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A. I liked to meet new people in the past. Now, I can't say that I hate it, But actually I don't like it. Because I feel comfortable when I meet familiar people. I'm little nervous when I meet new people. So I speak a lot to break uncomfortable in me and new people. It's very tired. But, meeting new people is helpful to me, because It's new experience. So I don't avoid it If I feel uncomfortable or tired.

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Hi there, Eddy!

Here's your edited composition. Speak soon!

Cheers,
Jean~~



I liked to meet new people in the past. 
>> or: I used to enjoy meeting new people. 

Now, I can't say that I hate it, But actually I don't like it. Because I feel comfortable when I meet familiar people. 
>> Now, I can't say that I hate it, but I actually don't like it because I feel more comfortable when I meet someone I'm familiar with.

I'm little nervous when I meet new people. 
>> or: I find it awkward and tense when I'm around people I don't know. 

So I speak a lot to break uncomfortable in me and new people. 
>> So I feel the need to speak a lot to break the awkwardness and get rid of the feelings of discomfort that are normally present during first meetings. 

It's very tired. But, meeting new people is helpful to me, because It's new experience. 
>> This kind of feeling and situation is tiring, however, I can't deny that getting acquainted with new individuals is helpful to me because it's a new experience. 

So I don't avoid it If I feel uncomfortable or tired.
>> Therefore, I don't avoid it even if I feel uncomfortable or tired.
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