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If you had a lot of money, what is the first thing you\'ll buy and why?

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If I had a lot of money, I will give someone it instead of buying something because I think that I have to return their favor. Thanks to them, I could live a better life. If they didn't help me, I wouldn't be able to live a life happily. They helped me, so, this is my turn. I have to express that I'm thankful to them. This is a chance and my dream! But this sentences are not reality. I know that making dreams come true is not easy, but I hope that it can be come true.

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Hi Kimberly:)

I hope that those dreams will come true for you. You are a very thoughtful person. :) You always think of others first before yourself, 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If I had a lot of money, I will give someone it instead of buying something because I think that I have to return their favor. 
>> If I had a lot of money, I will give it to someone instead of buying something because I think that I have to return their favor. 

Thanks to them, I could live a better life. 
>> CORRECT

If they didn't help me, I wouldn't be able to live a life happily. 
>> CORRECT

They helped me, so, this is my turn. 
>> They helped me, so this is my way of giving back. 

I have to express that I'm thankful to them. 
>>  I have to express that I'm thankful for them. 

This is a chance and my dream! But this sentences are not reality. 
>> This is one of my dreams but it hasn't come true yet. 

I know that making dreams come true is not easy, but I hope that it can be come true.
>> I know that making dreams come true is not easy, but I hope that it will be someday. 
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