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How do you maintain your good health? / What do you think is the best time to exercise?

작성자: 주*빈
2022-02-15 758

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To maintain my health. First, for physical I have to exercise regularly and eat some vegetables and drink water. Exercise is easy way to prevent many diseases. Eating vegetables, drinking water can fill up nutrients. Second, for mental I have to sleep enough, do meditation to be peaceful and think always positively, control my stress. I think the most important thing here is controlling my stress, when we don't relieve the stress we'll have a mental illness the stress can cause lots of bad situations. Doing these basic things can change and maintain our health. The best time to exercise for me is morning because I'm a morning person so I have big power in that time. And I heard exercise when we are an empty stomach we can burn our body fat. Also, we can spend the day more fresh. So I think the best time to exercise is morning.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용


Hi Risa,
Being healthy should be part of your overall lifestyle. Living a healthy lifestyle can help prevent chronic diseases and long-term illnesses. Feeling good about yourself and taking care of your health is important for your self-esteem and self-image. Maintain a healthy lifestyle by doing what is right for your body. ~ Teacher QUENNY..

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To maintain my health.
>> These are the ways how I maintain my health. 
 First, for physical I have to exercise regularly and eat some vegetables and drink water.
>>  First, for my physical health, I have to exercise regularly and eat some vegetables, and drink water.
 Exercise is easy way to prevent many diseases. 
>>   Exercise is an easy way to prevent many diseases. 
Eating vegetables, drinking water can fill up nutrients. 
>> Eating vegetables, drinking water can fill up nutrients.(CORRECT)
Second, for mental I have to sleep enough, do meditation to be peaceful and think always positively, control my stress.
>> Second, for my mental health, I have to sleep enough, do meditation to be peaceful, always think positively or be optimistic and control my stress.
 I think the most important thing here is controlling my stress, when we don't relieve the stress we'll have a mental illness the stress can cause lots of bad situations. 
>>  I think the most important thing here is controlling my stress, when we don't relieve the stress we'll have a mental illness the stress can cause lots of bad situations.(CORRECT)
Doing these basic things can change and maintain our health.
>> Doing these basic activities can change and maintain our health.
 The best time to exercise for me is morning because I'm a morning person so I have big power in that time. 
>> The best time to exercise for me is in the morning because I'm a morning person so I am powerful and energetic at that time. 
And I heard exercise when we are an empty stomach we can burn our body fat. 
>> And I heard that when we exercise with an empty stomach we can burn our body fats.
Also, we can spend the day more fresh. 
>> Also, we can spend the day fresher. 
So I think the best time to exercise is morning.
>> So I think the best time to exercise is in the morning.
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To maintain my health. First, for physical I have to exercise regularly and eat some vegetables and drink water. Exercise is easy way to prevent many diseases. Eating vegetables, drinking water can fill up nutrients. Second, for mental I have to sleep enough, do meditation to be peaceful and think always positively, control my stress. I think the most important thing here is controlling my stress, when we don't relieve the stress we'll have a mental illness the stress can cause lots of bad situations. Doing these basic things can change and maintain our health. The best time to exercise for me is morning because I'm a morning person so I have big power in that time. And I heard exercise when we are an empty stomach we can burn our body fat. Also, we can spend the day more fresh. So I think the best time to exercise is morning.
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