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If you had a lot of money, what is the first thing you\'ll buy and why?

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If I had a lot of money, I will buy my dream house that is a two-story house with a yard and an attic. So I can grill barbecue or Sam Gyeob Sal at the yard with my family or friends. Also, An attic where I can see the constellations.

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Hi Elic:)

Great and practical choice! This is a perfect house for inviting people over and having parties. I hope you can invest in one some day. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If I had a lot of money, I will buy my dream house that is a two-story house with a yard and an attic. 
>> If I had a lot of money, I will buy my dream house which is a two-story house with a yard and an attic. 

So I can grill barbecue or Sam Gyeob Sal at the yard with my family or friends. 
>> I want this so I can grill and eat samgyeopsal at the yard with my family or friends. 

Also, An attic where I can see the constellations.
>> Also, an attic is where I can see the constellations. 
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