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What springs to your mind when you hear the word ice cream?

작성자: 황*하
2022-02-16 941

회원님의 영작문

It was one of my favorite snacks when I was teenager. I am not sure if the weather was hotter than now. I guess young people easily feel hot, that's why I love eating ice cream. It was not common to eat it in winter but many people enjoy eating it regardless of seasons. The Baskin Rabison is the first thing that comes in my mind because it is the most famous shop and everybody love. However, I like traditional ice cream due to my preference. Ice cream in big chain looks beautiful and delicious but I am not sure if it contains more healthier ingredients. In addition, the price is much expensive than products at supermarket. I would select other snacks if I have a chance to eat ice cream in BR. It is like wast of money for me. However, I might look for ice cream if it becomes hot.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Hwang!^^ 

How I wish I can actually make ice cream. I never tried eating home-made ice cream. 
My favorite flavor is vanilla, it's plain and simple. 
I always hear about Baskin Robbins ice cream. Unfortunately, we don't have it in our city. 
If I will go to Manila, I would definitely try this ice cram shop.  

Teacher Andrea 

It was one of my favorite snacks when I was teenager. 
>> Correct

I am not sure if the weather was hotter than now. 
>> I am not sure if the weather is hotter now than before. 

I guess young people easily feel hot, that's why I love eating ice cream. 
>> Correct 

It was not common to eat it in winter but many people enjoy eating it regardless of seasons. 
>> It was not common to eat it in winter but many people enjoy eating it regardless of the season.  

The Baskin Rabison is the first thing that comes in my mind because it is the most famous shop and everybody love. 
>> Baskin Robbins is the first thing that comes to my mind because it is the most famous shop and everybody love it. 

However, I like traditional ice cream due to my preference. 
>> However, I personally prefer traditional ice creams. 

Ice cream in big chain looks beautiful and delicious but I am not sure if it contains more healthier ingredients. 
>> Ice cream in big chain looks beautiful and delicious but I am not sure if it contains healthier ingredients than home mad ones.  

In addition, the price is much expensive than products at supermarket. 
>> In addition, the price is more expensive than products at the supermarket. 

I would select other snacks if I have a chance to eat ice cream in BR. 
>> Correct 

It is like wast of money for me. 
>> It feels like a waste of money. 

However, I might look for ice cream if it becomes hot.
>> However, I might crave for ice cream if it becomes hot.
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