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The house work that I enjoy the most is cooking. Unlike other houseworks, cooking has various patterns. For example, I can cook a soup in the bowl. I can cook pork dishes in the pan. I can even make bread from the machine. It is the reason why I like cooking the most.
On the other hand, I don't like taking out of garbage the most. I need to go outside, but it is so cold.
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The trip to Las Vegas was the most memorable vacation I had. First of all, I got to enjoy a stroll from many kinds of famous streets in there. Moreover, I was impressed by the insane shows which were performed in that area. I can say this vacation was the best because of these fabulous memories.
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I have never been to Europe, so I hope to visit there. Since I have been to a lot of countries in other continents, visiting Europe has been one of my dreams, I hope to visit soccer stadium in there, and eat a wealth of foods. Furthermore, I want to make friends from there, too. I am sure that I can enjoy these things

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Hi Harry, 
     You made good sentences however you committed some grammar lapses. You need to be aware of the proper uses of tenses. You have to focus more and pay attention to how words are used and sentences are structured. You have to be conscious of how sentences are put together. Keep improving your writing skills. ~ Teacher QUENNY..
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The house work that I enjoy the most is cooking. 
>> The housework that I enjoy the most is cooking. 
Unlike other houseworks, cooking has various patterns. 
>>Unlike other housework, cooking has various procedures. 
For example, I can cook a soup in the bowl.
>> For example, I can cook soup in a bowl or in a stove. 
I can cook pork dishes in the pan. 
>> I can cook pork dishes in the pan. (CORRECT)
I can even make bread from the machine. 
>> I can even bake bread from the oven. 
It is the reason why I like cooking the most.
>> It is the reason why I like cooking the most.
On the other hand, I don't like taking out of garbage the most. 
>> On the other hand, I don't like taking out garbage the most. 
I need to go outside, but it is so cold.
>> I don't like to go outside because it's so cold. 
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The trip to Las Vegas was the most memorable vacation I had.
>> The trip to Las Vegas was the most memorable vacation I had.
 First of all, I got to enjoy a stroll from many kinds of famous streets in there. 
>>  First of all, I got to enjoy a stroll from various kinds of famous streets there. 
Moreover, I was impressed by the insane shows which were performed in that area. 
>> Moreover, I was impressed by the insane shows which were performed in that area.(CORRECT) 
I can say this vacation was the best because of these fabulous memories.
>>I can say this vacation was the best because of these fabulous memories.(CORRECT) 
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I have never been to Europe, so I hope to visit there. 
>> I have never been to Europe, so I hope to visit that country. 
Since I have been to a lot of countries in other continents, visiting Europe has been one of my dreams, I hope to visit soccer stadium in there, and eat a wealth of foods.
>> Since I have been to a lot of countries on other continents, visiting Europe has been one of my dreams, I hope to visit the Soccer stadium there, and eat a wealth of food.
 Furthermore, I want to make friends from there, too. I am sure that I can enjoy these things.
>> Furthermore, I want to meet and make many friends from there, too. I am sure that I can enjoy these things.

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The house work that I enjoy the most is cooking. Unlike other houseworks, cooking has various patterns. For example, I can cook a soup in the bowl. I can cook pork dishes in the pan. I can even make bread from the machine. It is the reason why I like cooking the most.
On the other hand, I don't like taking out of garbage the most. I need to go outside, but it is so cold.
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The trip to Las Vegas was the most memorable vacation I had. First of all, I got to enjoy a stroll from many kinds of famous streets in there. Moreover, I was impressed by the insane shows which were performed in that area. I can say this vacation was the best because of these fabulous memories.
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I have never been to Europe, so I hope to visit there. Since I have been to a lot of countries in other continents, visiting Europe has been one of my dreams, I hope to visit soccer stadium in there, and eat a wealth of foods. Furthermore, I want to make friends from there, too. I am sure that I can enjoy these things
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