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How do you feel and what do you do after a long vacation? Explain your answer in detail.

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After a long vacation, I will feel be afraid of my school life and resolve doing my best for a year. Also, I will search and do many things since I'm a school president for a year. I hope that for a year, I will be able to do my best because in next year, I should enter a high school. Of course, I hope that I can keep doing my best from now on. In this year, I think that I will face the problems so, I'm very scary, but I hope that I can stand them.

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Hi Kimberly:)

I'm sure you're going to do fine. Your the best school president your classmates can ever have.  

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

After a long vacation, I will feel be afraid of my school life and resolve doing my best for a year. 
>>  After a long vacation, I will feel be afraid of going back to my school life and resolve it by doing my best for a year. 

Also, I will search and do many things since I'm a school president for a year. 
>> Also, I will search and do many things since I'm the school president for a year. 

I hope that for a year, I will be able to do my best because in next year, I should enter a high school. 
>> I hope that for a year, I will be able to do my best because  next year, I should will enter high school. 

Of course, I hope that I can keep doing my best from now on. 
>> CORRECT

In this year, I think that I will face the problems so, I'm very scary, but I hope that I can stand them.
>> This year, I think that I will face the problems so I'm very scared. I hope that I can stand them.
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