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Best way to stay fit and healthy is simply to lead a normal life. What are your thoughts about this?

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Best way to stay fit and healthy is simply to lead a normal life. What are your thoughts about this? Write it down in complete sentences.

First, you should try not to be a couch potato. If you like to eat potato chips while watching TV, it can stay you to be unhealthy. Acually, I'm a couch potato. I don't like exercising. Even if I stay in a hotel in quarantine period, so I need to exercise to make my body healthy, but I don't do anything. I'm a pig.
Second, if you don't like to exercise, I recommend you to hang out with your friends. You might think that could make you gain more weight because of eating out, however you also need to go around somewhere with your friends and it could make you walk a lot.
Lastly, having a routine is a good way to stay healthy too. Just living alone with no routine like me, can let your life boring. Do something!
Thank you.

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Best way to stay fit and healthy is simply to lead a normal life.
>>CORRECT
What are your thoughts about this?
>>CORRECT
Write it down in complete sentences.
>>CORRECT
First, you should try not to be a couch potato.
>>CORRECT
If you like to eat potato chips while watching TV, it can stay you to be unhealthy.
>>Eating potato chips while watching TV is very unhealthy.
Acually, I'm a couch potato.
>>Actually, I'm a couch potato.
I don't like exercising.
>>CORRECT
Even if I stay in a hotel in quarantine period, so I need to exercise to make my body healthy,
>>Even if I'm quarantined in a hotel, I still need to exercise to keep my body healthy.
but I don't do anything. I'm a pig.
>>But I'm not doing anything. I'm like a pig.
Second, if you don't like to exercise, I recommend you to hang out with your friends.
>>Second, If you don't like to exercise, I recommend that you hang out with your friends.
You might think that could make you gain more weight because of eating out,
>>You might think that that will make you gain more weight since you'll be eating out.
however you also need to go around somewhere with your friends and it could make you walk a lot.
>>However, being with friends also means going around and strolling which is a form of exercise.
Lastly, having a routine is a good way to stay healthy too.
>>CORRECT
Just living alone with no routine like me, can let your life boring.
>>Living alone without a routine like me can make life boring.
Do something!
>>CORRECT
Thank you.
>>CORRECT

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