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Is it better to be a boss or an employee? Why?

작성자: 김*윤
2022-02-19 828

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I think being a boss is better than being an employee. Of course there are a lot of risks at being a boss but I firmly believe the merits outweigh it. This is because we can adjust what we do and we are easier to achieve our self-realization than people who are an employee. To begin with, we can coordinate our tasks and projects almost freely. In fact, CEO decides that which project is good for the company. On top of that, we can challenge to accomplish our goal of life by working at worksite more easily. This is because we can insist on our argument more than we do as an employee in the company and that teach us what we want now. If we work as an employee, we would have to follow supervisor's orders and can't work as our style. Eventually, we forget our dream,goal and become a machine. Of course, there are people who are an exception. I'm just telling you It is better to be a boss than being an employee with the view of the freedom of selecting tasks and achieving the self-realization

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Kevin!
You did a nice job comparing the differences of being a boss and an employee.  Well, that is true!  But in reality only a few lucky individuals could be called as bosses because they have the financial ability to make their own company or business.  I hope you could be your own boss too. :)


~T. Maine

I think being a boss is better than being an employee.
>>Correct.
Of course there are a lot of risks at being a boss but I firmly believe the merits outweigh it.
>>Of course, there are a lot of risks being a boss, but I firmly believe that the merits outweigh it.
This is because we can adjust what we do and we are easier to achieve our self-realization than people who are an employee.
>>This is because we can adjust what we can do and we easily achieve our self-realization than the employees.
To begin with, we can coordinate our tasks and projects almost freely.
>>Correct.
In fact, CEO decides that which project is good for the company.
>>In fact, a CEO decides which project is good for the company.
On top of that, we can challenge to accomplish our goal of life by working at worksite more easily.
>>On top of that, we can challenge ourselves to accomplish our goals in life by working at the worksite more easily.
This is because we can insist on our argument more than we do as an employee in the company and that teach us what we want now.
>>Correct.
If we work as an employee, we would have to follow supervisor's orders and can't work as our style.
>>If we work as an employee, we should follow the supervisor's orders and can't work on our own.
Eventually, we forget our dream,goal and become a machine.
>>Eventually, we forget our dream, goal, and turn into a machine.
Of course, there are people who are an exception.
>>Of course, there are people who are in exception to this.
 I'm just telling you It is better to be a boss than being an employee with the view of the freedom of selecting tasks and achieving the self-realization
>>I'm just telling you that it is better to be a boss than being an employee considering the freedom of selecting tasks and achieving self-realization.

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