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What do you think is the best company to work at in your country and why?

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The best company to work at in my country is public center like a city hall or the Blue house because working in the public center is stable. Also, I can work in there for a long time. These are the reasone why many Koreans want to be an public official. Of course, private corporations are also good to work, but it is affected by its owner. So, I may be in danger, but huge companies are better. It is the reason why many Koreans prefer huge companies like Samsung or LG to small or medium companies.

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Hi Kimberly:)

Yes, working as a public official is more stable than working in private sectors. You can really see yourself retiring there. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

The best company to work at in my country is public center like a city hall or the Blue house because working in the public center is stable.
>>The best company to work at in my country are government offices like the city hall or the Blue House. It's stable to work in those places. 

 Also, I can work in there for a long time. 
>>  Also, I can work there for a long time. 

These are the reasone why many Koreans want to be an public official. 
>> These are the reasons why many Koreans want to be a public official. 

Of course, private corporations are also good to work, but it is affected by its owner. 
>> Of course, working in private corporations are also good, but it is always affected by it's owner. 

So, I may be in danger, but huge companies are better. 
>> So, there is no stability there unless you work for a big company. 

It is the reason why many Koreans prefer huge companies like Samsung or LG to small or medium companies
>> This is the reason why many Koreans prefer working for huge companies like Samsung or LG. 
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