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In my think... worst invention is a machine to boil eggs.
I have that machine but I should throw it away
When I used that machine, i was waist 5 eggs.
Because the egg skin didn't peel off.
Um.. peel off but I have only egg york.
Egg whites it's with the skin peel off.
And then I'm never use that machine...:)

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Hi Ann:)

You made me laugh when I was reading your answer. Hahaha! You should give it another try. Maybe it'll work again. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

In my think... worst invention is a machine to boil eggs.
>> I think the worst invention is a egg boiling machine. 

I have that machine but I should throw it away
>> CORRECT

When I used that machine, i was waist 5 eggs.
>> When I used it, I wasted 5 eggs. 

Because the egg skin didn't peel off.
>> The egg's shell didn't peel off. 

Um.. peel off but I have only egg york.
> It was removes but only the egg yolk was left. 

Egg whites it's with the skin peel off.
>> The egg whites came off  with the shell. 

And then I'm never use that machine...:)
>> And I am never using this machine again. :) 
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