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My favorite english movie is Dreamgirls.
The main acter is Beyonce, my favorite and love
She is perfect. act, sing, dance everything.
The story is black music history.
Story is very interested and it is musical movie.
That's why I love it.
OST it's perfect too.
Every actor is good at sing.

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Hi Ann:)

I've never seen that movie before. It caught my attention now based on how you described it. I'm going to watch it hehe. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

My favorite english movie is Dreamgirls.
>> My favorite English movie is "Dream girls". 

The main acter is Beyonce, my favorite and love
>> The main actress here is Beyonce, my favorite singer. 

She is perfect. act, sing, dance everything.
>> She is perfect in everything; acting, singing, and dancing. 

The story is black music history.
>> The story is about black music history. 

Story is very interested and it is musical movie.
>> The  story is very interesting.  It is also a musical. 

That's why I love it.
>> CORRECT

OST it's perfect too.
>> It's OST is perfect too. 

Every actor is good at sing.
>> Every actor is good at singing. 

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