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Claire\'s Homework

작성자: 박*연
2022-02-24 713

회원님의 영작문



> What natural phenomenon would you like to witness in person?

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you for this information Claire. The polar night and while night seem fascinating. Although, they could also cause disruptions of daily activities including sleeping patterns. 


Many natural phenomena in the world show us the mystique of nature. 

>>> correct

>>> OR: Many natural phenomena in the world show us the mysteriousness of nature. 

If I can witness one of them in my lifetime, I would like to see aurora, polar night, and white night. 

>>> correct

Aurora is well known for its beautiful look. 

>>> correct.

>>> OR: Aurora is well known for its beautiful appearance.

Polar night and white nights is a phenomenon that can only be seen in north polar regions.

>>> correct

In the first place, a beautiful view in northern countries, aurora.

>>> correct

Seeing the aurora is the most popular bucket list goal among many people. 

>>> correct

Experiencing Aurora is one of my life bucket lists too. 

>>>  correct

Aurora, also known as northern lights, is a well-known beautiful natural phenomenon that can be seen in northern countries such as Iceland, Norway, Greenland, Swedish, Finnish Lapland, Scotland, Siberia, Canada, and Alaska. 

>>> correct

Because north lights are visible closer to the arctic circle, we can’t always see the aurora, even in the northern countries, which is why aurora is rare. 

>>> correct

The higher the latitude, the better chance for seeing the night sky with aurora. 

>>> correct

Aurora happens very high in the atmosphere. 

>>> correct

Aurora dye the sky into many colors.

>>> correct

Second of all, continuous night in polar regions, polar night.

>>> correct

>>> OR: Second in the list is the continuous night in polar regions, the polar night.

Polar night is a night period without the sun during winter in the polar regions.

>>> correct

It’s a phenomenon that only happens in the pole of the earth.

>>> correct

 The polar night continues for half of a year in the northern hemisphere and the southern hemisphere in turns. 

>>> correct

Polar night is a phenomenon that can be witnessed only in polar regions. 

>>> correct

There are a few kinds of polar nights, which have differences in their periods and places. 

>>> correct

For example, Antarctica has six months of daylight in summer and six months of darkness in winter. 

>>> correct

In polar regions like Antarctica, the evening lasts for six months during winter. 

>>> correct

The polar night is a natural phenomenon that we are not used to. 

>>> correct

The polar night took my attention as it looked novel phenomenon.

>>> correct

>>> OR: The polar night took my attention as it looked for novel phenomenon.

The white night is the opposite phenomenon of the polar night. 

>>> correct

The white night is a night in which it never gets completely dark at high latitudes outside the Arctic and Antarctic circles. 

>>> correct

The white night lasts for several days to several months, meaning the daylight maintain for several days to several months. 

>>> correct

White nights occur during the summer months in both poles. 

>>> correct

White nights are also called civil twilight in scientific terms. 

>>> correct

Russia has white nights. 

>>> correct

Russia holds 10days of the festival during the white nights period.

>>> correct

Natural phenomena show us the mystique of nature that we’ve never known. 

>>> correct 

The charm of the earth always shows the amazement of nature. 

>>> correct

Someday we might witness some of the natural phenomena during our lifetime.

>>> correct

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