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What do you think is the best company to work at in your country and why?

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In my opinion, the best companies to work are the big companies.
The purpose that we work is to earn money and to buy some stuffs that we need for living.
And if we think about this, we could know that the big companies are good to work.
Because they are able to give us money, and there is almost no possibility to be broken down.
We can say that working in the big company is really safe for us to earn money.
And we can challenge many things because we can do a lot of things in the big companies.
That's why I think that the best companies to work are the big companies that are well known for the people.

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Hi John:)

This is true. Working for big companies has a lesser chance that it will shut down so there would be more stability. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

In my opinion, the best companies to work are the big companies.
>>  In my opinion, the best companies to work for are big companies.

The purpose that we work is to earn money and to buy some stuffs that we need for living.
>> The purpose of working is to earn money and buy things that we need for living. 

And if we think about this, we could know that the big companies are good to work.
>> If we think about this, we would realize that working for big companies is good. 

Because they are able to give us money, and there is almost no possibility to be broken down.
>> It is because they have the capacity to give us money and there's little possibility that they will shut down. 

We can say that working in the big company is really safe for us to earn money.
>> We can say that working for a big company is stable. 

And we can challenge many things because we can do a lot of things in the big companies.
>> We may face a lot of challenges since it's a big company. 

That's why I think that the best companies to work are the big companies that are well known for the people.
>> That's why I think that big companies are the best to work for and is well-known by the people. 
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