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Which one do you think is better, living in a country that has 2 seasons or 4 seasons? Explain your

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Living in a country that has 4 seasons is better for me because on the spring season, I can see flowers like blossom or forsythia and go flower viewing. On the autumn season, I can feel emotional feeling and wear brown clothes. On the Summer season, I can eat watermelons and go to swimming pool. On the winter season, I can make a snowman and eat hot dishes. These are the reasons why living in a country that has 4 seasons is better for me.

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Hi Kimberly :)

Yes, I envy your country. You can do various activities every season. I wish we can experience that too!. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

Living in a country that has 4 seasons is better for me because on the spring season, I can see flowers like blossom or forsythia and go flower viewing.
>> Living in a country that has 4 seasons is better for me. For example, on the spring season, I can see flowers like cherry blossoms or forsythia. I can also go flower viewing.

On the autumn season, I can feel emotional feeling and wear brown clothes. 
>> During the autumn season, I feel emotional and I usually wear brown colored clothes. 

On the Summer season, I can eat watermelons and go to swimming pool. 
>> During the summer season, I can eat watermelons and go to swimming pools. 
 
On the winter season, I can make a snowman and eat hot dishes. 
>> Lastly, on winter, I can make a snowman and eat hot dishes. 

These are the reasons why living in a country that has 4 seasons is better for me.
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