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Which one do you think is better, living in a country that has 2 seasons or 4 seasons?

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Definitely, I want to live in a country that has 4 seasons. Having a lot of seasons means that we can make many memories. I really hate being cold and easily get a cold, I like snowy days. I can make a snowman, I can also do snowball fight, and there are many things I can do.

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Hi Elic:)

Yes, I envy your country. You can do various activities every season. I wish we can experience that too!. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

Definitely, I want to live in a country that has 4 seasons. 
>> I definitely want to live in a country that has 4 seasons. 

Having a lot of seasons means that we can make many memories. 
>> CORRECT

I really hate being cold and easily get a cold, I like snowy days. 
>> I really hate being cold and I easily get a cold but I still like snowy days. 

I can make a snowman, I can also do snowball fight, and there are many things I can do.
>> I can make a snowman, have a snowball fight and many more. 
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