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Writing Task (Feb 23th, 2022)

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What sports are you good at?
>>
I¡¯m not good at any sports. However, there¡¯s few sports I like to play.
One of them is the Basketball.
Today I woke up at 6:00 am feeling too full in my stomach, since I ate too much last night. That made me tossed and turned during the whole night. Even though I wasn¡¯t completely sober, I wore my clothe and brought my basketball to the near outdoor basketball court. It was fridging cold. I bounced the ball a few times and got back home immediately because it was too cold and my two hands were half frozen.
I liked to play football, but after having second surgery in my right knee, I quit doing it because I had to use my right leg to kick a ball.

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Hi, U Seung! 

Basketball is a fun game to play. That's too bad that you couldn't enjoy it because of the cold weather. Well, the Spring season is coming, you might be able to enjoy playing it during that season. 

Thank you for sharing! 

~T. Roanne ^_^
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I¡¯m not good at any sports. 
>> Correct! 
However, there¡¯s few sports I like to play.
>> Correct! 
One of them is the Basketball.
>> Correct! 
Today I woke up at 6:00 am feeling too full in my stomach, since I ate too much last night. 
>> Correct! 
That made me tossed and turned during the whole night. 
>> Correct! 
Even though I wasn¡¯t completely sober, I wore my clothe and brought my basketball to the near outdoor basketball court. 
>>Even though I wasn¡¯t completely sober, I wore my clothes and brought my basketball to the nearest outdoor basketball court. 
It was fridging cold. 
>> It was freezing cold. 
I bounced the ball a few times and got back home immediately because it was too cold and my two hands were half frozen.
>> Correct! 
I liked to play football, but after having second surgery in my right knee, I quit doing it because I had to use my right leg to kick a ball.
>> I liked to play football, but after having the second surgery on my right knee, I quit doing it because I had to use my right leg to kick a ball.
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