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I love four seasons country. Like Korea.
We have spring, summer, autumn, winter.
And my favorite weather is spring, autumn.
Because temperature is so comfortable to feel warm. Not so cold not so hot.
I don't like wear to much thing. But in winter weather is cold outside we should wear warm.
And summer is so hot, I can't walk outside free.
That's why I love four seasons.

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Hi Ann:)

Yes, I envy your country. You can do various activities every season. I wish we can experience that too!. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I love four seasons country. Like Korea.
>> I love countries with seasons, like South Korea. 

We have spring, summer, autumn, winter.
>> We have spring, summer, autumn, and winter.

And my favorite weather is spring, autumn.
>> My favorite ones are spring and autumn. 

Because temperature is so comfortable to feel warm. Not so cold not so hot.
>> it is because the temperature is just right. It's not too cold or too hot. 

I don't like wear to much thing. But in winter weather is cold outside we should wear warm.
>> I don't like wearing a lot of clothes but it's cold during the winter, so I need to wear warm clothes. 

And summer is so hot, I can't walk outside free.
>> During summer, it's so hot so I can't walk outside freely. 

That's why I love four seasons.
>> That's why I love the four seasons.

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