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Which one do you think is better, living in a country that has 2 seasons or 4 seasons? Explain your

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In my opinion, living in a country that has 4 seasons is better than living in a country that has 2 seasons.
If we live in an area that has 4 seasons, we can prepare for next seasons very easily.
The seasons change smoothly, so we can adjust easily than 2 seasons.
If we live in an area that has 2 seasons, the seasons will change suddenly, so we can be hard to adjust in the seasons.
And also I adjusted in the area that has 4 seasons, so I am comfortable with 4 seasons.
And also we can experience more things by living in the 4 seasons.
So in my opinion, living in a country that has 4 seasons is better than living in a country that has 2 seasons.

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Hi John:)

Yes, I envy your country. You can do various activities every season. I wish we can experience that too!. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

In my opinion, living in a country that has 4 seasons is better than living in a country that has 2 seasons.
>> CORRECT

If we live in an area that has 4 seasons, we can prepare for next seasons very easily.
>> CORRECT

The seasons change smoothly, so we can adjust easily than 2 seasons.
>> The seasons change smoothly, so we can adjust easily. 

If we live in an area that has 2 seasons, the seasons will change suddenly, so we can be hard to adjust in the seasons.
>> If we live in an area that has 2 seasons, the seasons will change suddenly, so it would be hard for us to adjust. 

And also I adjusted in the area that has 4 seasons, so I am comfortable with 4 seasons.
>> Also, I am used to living in a place with 4 seasons so it's more comfortable for me. 

And also we can experience more things by living in the 4 seasons.
>> We can experience more things with it as well. 

So in my opinion, living in a country that has 4 seasons is better than living in a country that has 2 seasons.
>> CORRECT
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